Band 7 model answer Task 2 · Opinion essay

Should governments tax sugary drinks

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The prompt

Some people believe that governments should place a special tax on drinks with high sugar content in order to improve public health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Band 7 model answer (257 words)

It is often argued that a special tax on sugary drinks would improve the health of the population. I agree with this policy to a large extent, because price is one of the few levers that changes behaviour quickly, although a tax alone will not solve the problem.

The main reason to support a sugar tax is that it works through everyday decisions. Most people do not study nutrition labels, but almost everyone notices prices. When a bottle of cola costs noticeably more than water, some buyers switch without thinking of it as a health choice at all. Manufacturers respond even faster: in countries that have introduced such taxes, several companies cut the sugar in their recipes to keep their products in a cheaper tax band, which improved drinks for every customer, not only the health-conscious ones.

A further benefit is that the revenue can be reinvested. Money raised from sugary drinks can fund school sports, subsidised fruit and vegetables, or public health campaigns, so the policy attacks the problem from two directions at once.

Critics argue that such taxes hit poorer families hardest, and this concern deserves a serious answer. However, these families also suffer most from diabetes and tooth decay, and a tax that pushes them towards cheaper, healthier options arguably protects them rather than punishing them.

In conclusion, I largely support taxing high-sugar drinks. It changes both consumer and manufacturer behaviour and raises money for prevention, provided that governments treat it as one part of a wider health strategy rather than a complete solution.

Why this reaches Band 7

  • Task Response

    The position is stated precisely in the introduction, "to a large extent", and the essay stays consistent with that nuance, supporting the tax while conceding it is not sufficient on its own. The counter-argument about poorer families is answered, not just mentioned.

  • Coherence and Cohesion

    One idea per paragraph, with the shorter revenue paragraph acting as a deliberate second supporting point. Referencing such as "this concern deserves a serious answer" ties the rebuttal to the criticism cleanly.

  • Lexical Resource

    Less common but natural phrasing like "one of the few levers", "tax band" and "attacks the problem from two directions" shows the flexibility Band 7 requires.

  • Grammatical Range and Accuracy

    A wide range of structures, including "When a bottle of cola costs noticeably more..." and a concessive "although" clause in the thesis, with errors rare enough not to distract.

The one fix to reach Band 7

Band 6 answers on this question tend to agree completely and ignore the strongest objection. The single upgrade is to name the best argument against your position, here the burden on poorer families, and answer it directly instead of pretending it does not exist.

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