Causes of stress in modern life
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The prompt
Stress is now a major problem in many countries, affecting people of all ages. What do you think are the main causes of stress in modern life, and what measures could reduce it?
Band 7 model answer (264 words)
Stress has quietly become one of the defining health problems of our time, affecting students, workers and even young children. This essay will identify what I believe are the two main causes and propose measures that could genuinely reduce the pressure.
The first cause is that work no longer ends. Smartphones and email mean employees are reachable at dinner, at weekends and on holiday, so the recovery time that previous generations took for granted has largely disappeared. Many people are effectively on call for years at a stretch, and chronic pressure without rest is precisely what turns ordinary demands into stress. The second cause is financial insecurity. In many cities, housing costs have risen far faster than wages, so even people with stable jobs feel they are running to stand still, and that feeling follows them home every night.
Reducing stress therefore means restoring boundaries and security. Governments can follow the example of countries that give employees a legal right to disconnect, making it unlawful to require answers to messages outside working hours. Employers who measure output rather than hours visible online remove a major source of quiet anxiety. On the financial side, building more affordable housing attacks the deepest single cause, while schools can prepare the next generation by teaching practical money management. Individuals can help themselves too, chiefly by treating sleep and exercise as appointments rather than luxuries.
In conclusion, modern stress grows mainly from work that never switches off and money that never feels sufficient. Legal limits on out-of-hours contact, affordable housing and firmer personal boundaries would ease both pressures considerably.
Why this reaches Band 7
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Task Response
Two causes are chosen deliberately and argued for ("what I believe are the two main causes"), and every solution maps onto one of them, from the right to disconnect back to work that "no longer ends".
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Coherence and Cohesion
The pivot sentence "Reducing stress therefore means restoring boundaries and security" summarises the causes and previews the solutions in one line, which is sophisticated organisation.
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Lexical Resource
Vivid but accurate phrases such as "on call for years at a stretch", "running to stand still" and "appointments rather than luxuries" go beyond safe vocabulary.
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Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied complex sentences, including cleft-like emphasis in "chronic pressure without rest is precisely what turns ordinary demands into stress", with hardly any errors.
The one fix to reach Band 7
The usual Band 6 essay on stress lists five causes in one paragraph and five tips in the next, none developed. The upgrade is selection: commit to two causes, explain the mechanism behind each, and offer solutions that target those mechanisms specifically.
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