Band 8 model answer Task 2 · Opinion essay

Should mobile phones be banned in schools

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The prompt

Some people think that mobile phones should be banned in schools because they distract students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Band 8 model answer (255 words)

Few issues divide parents and teachers as sharply as the presence of mobile phones in the classroom. While I acknowledge that these devices can be genuinely useful learning tools, I firmly believe that they should be banned during school hours, because the disruption they cause far outweighs any occasional benefit.

The central problem is that smartphones are deliberately engineered to capture and hold attention, and adolescents are especially vulnerable to that pull. A single notification can derail a student's concentration for several minutes, and the constant temptation to check messages or scroll through social media makes sustained focus almost impossible. Even conscientious pupils who fully intend to behave often find themselves quietly distracted, and their learning suffers as a result. Removing phones from the equation allows teachers to reclaim the room and gives students a genuine chance to engage with the lesson in front of them.

Supporters of phones rightly point out that they can be valuable for research, quick calculations or educational apps. However, most schools already provide computers and tablets for exactly these purposes, under conditions that the teacher can supervise. A personal phone, by contrast, offers a private, unmonitored gateway to endless distraction, and the modest educational upside it provides does not begin to justify that risk.

In conclusion, although mobile phones undeniably have legitimate uses, their powerful capacity to fragment attention makes them unsuitable for a learning environment. I therefore strongly support a ban during school hours, with supervised school devices provided to meet any genuine educational need that may arise.

Why this reaches Band 8

  • Task Response

    The position is fully developed and unwavering, every point is extended with clear reasoning, and the counter-argument is not merely noted but convincingly answered, which is the mark of Band 8.

  • Coherence and Cohesion

    Cohesion is seamless and mostly invisible: ideas connect through meaning and well-judged referencing ("Removing phones from the equation...") rather than mechanical linkers.

  • Lexical Resource

    A wide, natural range of vocabulary used with precision and flexibility, including "engineered to capture and hold attention", "derail a student's concentration" and "fragment attention", with no awkwardness.

  • Grammatical Range and Accuracy

    A broad range of complex structures produced accurately and flexibly, with only the occasional slip, which is the Band 8 grammar profile.

The one fix to reach Band 8

The difference between a strong Band 7 and this Band 8 is not more ideas but sharper language and fuller extension. A Band 7 states a reason and gives an example; a Band 8 also explains the mechanism, here why phones are engineered to distract, in precise and natural wording.

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