Band 7 model answer Task 2 · Opinion essay

Can money buy happiness

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The prompt

Some people believe that having a lot of money is the key to a happy life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Band 7 model answer (261 words)

It is often claimed that wealth is the main ingredient of a happy life. I disagree with this view to a large extent, because money only supports happiness up to a certain point, beyond which relationships and purpose matter far more.

Money clearly contributes to wellbeing when it covers essentials. A person who cannot pay rent or afford medical care lives with constant anxiety, and no amount of positive thinking removes that pressure. In this sense, a stable income buys freedom from worry, which is a genuine form of happiness. It also opens doors to experiences, such as travel or education, that make life richer.

However, once basic needs are comfortably met, extra income adds surprisingly little. Wealthy people often work punishing hours to maintain their lifestyle, sacrificing the time with family and friends that actually sustains contentment. There is also a treadmill effect: each pay rise quickly becomes the new normal, so the satisfaction it brings fades within months. By contrast, strong relationships, good health and a sense of purpose keep delivering wellbeing for decades, and none of them can simply be purchased.

The people I would describe as genuinely happy tend to have enough money rather than a great deal of it. What sets them apart is that they spend their time on things they find meaningful, whether that is raising children, mastering a craft or serving their community.

In conclusion, money buys the foundations of happiness but not happiness itself. Beyond a comfortable income, it is connection and purpose, not wealth, that determine how satisfying a life feels.

Why this reaches Band 7

  • Task Response

    The position, disagreement "to a large extent", is stated in the introduction and never wavers. Conceding that money "buys freedom from worry" before limiting its value shows the balanced development Band 7 requires.

  • Coherence and Cohesion

    The essay moves logically from what money can do to what it cannot, and contrast markers such as "However" and "By contrast" carry the argument without feeling mechanical.

  • Lexical Resource

    Less common phrasing like "treadmill effect", "punishing hours" and "sustains contentment" is used precisely, not decoratively.

  • Grammatical Range and Accuracy

    Confident complex structures, including the cleft sentence "it is connection and purpose, not wealth, that determine...", with very few slips.

The one fix to reach Band 7

Band 6 answers to this question usually assert that "money cannot buy happiness" without explaining why. The single change that reaches Band 7 is to concede what money genuinely does provide, then show precisely where its effect stops.

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