The culture of working long hours
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The prompt
In many countries, employees are expected to work increasingly long hours, and some regularly stay at work late into the evening. Why is this happening, and what can be done to address the problem?
Band 7 model answer (252 words)
In many workplaces, staying late has quietly become the norm rather than the exception. This essay examines why working hours keep stretching and suggests some practical measures that employers and governments can take in response.
One major cause is the culture of visibility. In many companies, promotion still depends on being seen at a desk, so ambitious employees stay late to signal commitment even when they have little left to do. Modern technology has deepened the problem: smartphones and messaging apps mean the working day no longer ends at the office door, and replying to emails at midnight is treated as dedication. Job insecurity plays a part as well, since people who fear redundancy rarely feel able to leave on time.
The solutions need to target these causes directly. Employers should judge staff on output rather than hours, which removes the incentive to perform tiredness as loyalty. Managers can reinforce this by leaving on time themselves, because staff copy what leaders do, not what they announce. Governments also have a role: France's right to disconnect, which limits after-hours emails, shows that legislation can redraw the boundary between work and rest. Finally, enforcing existing overtime rules would protect the insecure workers who currently absorb unpaid hours in silence.
In conclusion, long-hours culture grows out of visibility-based promotion, constant connectivity and fear of job loss. Judging results instead of presence, setting an example at the top and legislating for a genuine right to switch off would let people work well without surrendering their evenings.
Why this reaches Band 7
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Task Response
Three causes, visibility culture, technology and insecurity, are each developed, and every solution offered maps onto one of them, which is exactly what a problem and solution question rewards.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Causes and solutions occupy separate paragraphs, and the explicit link "The solutions need to target these causes directly" ties the two halves into a single argument.
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Lexical Resource
Fresh, accurate phrasing such as "culture of visibility", "perform tiredness as loyalty" and "right to disconnect" goes well beyond stock vocabulary.
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Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied structures, including "staff copy what leaders do, not what they announce", with consistently high accuracy.
The one fix to reach Band 7
Band 6 versions of this essay give causes and solutions that never meet: overwork is blamed on technology but the solution is "employers should care about staff". The fix for Band 7 is to pair every solution with the specific cause it removes.
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