Band 7 model answer Task 2 · Opinion essay

Are sports stars paid too much

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The prompt

Top athletes and footballers often earn far more than doctors, teachers and other professionals who help society. Some people say these enormous salaries are unjustified. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Band 7 model answer (255 words)

Elite athletes can earn in a week what a nurse earns in several years, and many people find this indefensible. Although I understand the frustration, I mostly disagree that these salaries are unjustified, because they reflect how markets work rather than a judgement about human worth.

The main reason star players are paid so much is that they generate extraordinary revenue. A famous footballer fills stadiums, sells millions of shirts and attracts television deals worth billions, and the club captures that money largely because of a handful of individuals. Paying them a large share of the income they create is not corruption; it is the same logic that rewards a bestselling author or a leading surgeon in private practice.

It is also worth remembering how narrow the window of a sporting career is. Most professionals retire in their mid-thirties, often after a childhood sacrificed to training, and a single injury can end everything overnight. High salaries during the few productive years compensate for decades in which the athlete cannot earn from their talent at all.

That said, the comparison with teachers and doctors does expose a real problem: society underpays the professions it depends on. The sensible response, however, is to raise public sector wages through taxation, some of which already comes from athletes' enormous incomes, rather than to cap what entertainers earn.

In conclusion, sports stars' salaries are a rational price for the rare revenue they generate. The genuine injustice lies in how little we pay essential workers, and that is where reform belongs.

Why this reaches Band 7

  • Task Response

    A clear position, "I mostly disagree", is supported by two developed reasons: revenue generation and the "narrow window" of a sporting career. Redirecting the concern towards public sector pay handles the counter-argument rather than ignoring it.

  • Coherence and Cohesion

    Each paragraph advances one idea, and the pivot at "That said" turns the opposing view into part of the writer's own argument, which is sophisticated organisation.

  • Lexical Resource

    Precise topic language such as "generate extraordinary revenue", "captures that money" and "cap what entertainers earn", used naturally throughout.

  • Grammatical Range and Accuracy

    A wide range of structures, including the balanced sentence "Paying them a large share... is not corruption; it is the same logic...", with strong control.

The one fix to reach Band 7

A Band 6 answer typically lists reasons on both sides and drifts. The change that lifts it to Band 7 is committing to one verdict in the introduction and making even the concession paragraph serve that verdict.

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