Band 7 model answer Task 2 · Opinion essay

Spending money on endangered species

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The prompt

Some people say that spending large amounts of money on protecting endangered animal species is wasteful when human problems remain unsolved. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Band 7 model answer (255 words)

It is sometimes claimed that money spent saving endangered species would be better used on human problems such as poverty and disease. I disagree with this view almost entirely, because it treats conservation and human welfare as rivals when in reality they are deeply connected.

The central weakness of the argument is that protecting species usually means protecting ecosystems, and ecosystems serve people. Bees and other pollinators support the crops we eat, forests that shelter rare animals also store carbon and prevent floods, and healthy rivers supply drinking water to entire cities. When a species collapses, it is often an early warning that a system humans depend on is failing too. Conservation spending is therefore not charity for animals; it is maintenance of the machinery that keeps human life possible.

There is also an economic case that critics overlook. Wildlife tourism sustains millions of jobs, particularly in developing countries: a living elephant generates income for local communities for decades, while a poached one pays a criminal once. Regions that protect their iconic species frequently find that the animals become their most valuable long-term asset.

I accept that budgets are finite and that a government facing famine must feed its people first. But this is an argument about emergencies, not priorities in general, and most conservation spending is a tiny fraction of national budgets in any case.

In conclusion, protecting endangered animals is not a luxury we indulge at humanity's expense. It safeguards food, water, climate and jobs, and I believe it deserves sustained public funding.

Why this reaches Band 7

  • Task Response

    The essay does not just disagree; it attacks the premise of the question, arguing conservation and human welfare "are deeply connected", and the concession about famine keeps the position honest without weakening it.

  • Coherence and Cohesion

    The ecological argument and the economic argument are cleanly separated, and the semicolon sentence "not charity for animals; it is maintenance..." lands the first paragraph's point before the essay moves on.

  • Lexical Resource

    Precise and occasionally striking language: "pollinators", "early warning", "iconic species", "a poached one pays a criminal once".

  • Grammatical Range and Accuracy

    A wide range of forms, including the contrastive "while a poached one..." and the fronted concession "I accept that budgets are finite", with consistently accurate control.

The one fix to reach Band 7

A Band 6 essay here typically says animals are important and lists cute examples. The Band 7 move is to answer the actual claim in the prompt: show why the money-for-humans framing is a false choice, instead of ignoring it.

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