Banning smoking in public places
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The prompt
Some people think smoking should be banned in all public places, while others believe this restricts personal freedom too much. Do you agree or disagree that smoking should be banned in public places?
Band 7 model answer (253 words)
Whether smoking should be forbidden in public spaces remains a divisive question, since it sets public health against personal freedom. I agree that a ban is justified, because the freedom to smoke ends where another person's lungs begin.
The strongest argument for a ban is the harm done to people who never chose to smoke. Passive smoking is not a minor irritation: it is linked to asthma, heart disease and lung cancer in non-smokers, and children and hospitality staff are especially exposed. A waiter should not have to accept a health risk as a condition of employment, and a family should be able to sit in a park or at a bus stop without breathing someone else's smoke. Where one person's habit damages another person's health, the state has a clear duty to intervene.
A ban also helps smokers themselves. When lighting up becomes inconvenient, many people smoke less or quit entirely, and countries that restricted smoking in bars and restaurants saw exactly this pattern. Fewer visible smokers also means fewer teenagers who see the habit as normal.
Opponents argue that adults should be free to make their own choices. This is true, but the principle only holds when a choice affects nobody else. Nobody proposes banning smoking in private homes; the ban applies precisely to the shared spaces where the choice stops being private.
In conclusion, I firmly support banning smoking in public places. It protects non-smokers, discourages the habit itself, and limits freedom only where that freedom causes harm to others.
Why this reaches Band 7
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Task Response
A clear, consistently held position with a memorable framing, "the freedom to smoke ends where another person's lungs begin", and the personal freedom objection is engaged on its own terms rather than dismissed.
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Coherence and Cohesion
The argument builds logically from harm to others, to benefits for smokers, to the freedom rebuttal, and each paragraph opens with a sentence that states its job.
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Lexical Resource
Precise collocations such as "passive smoking", "a condition of employment" and "lighting up becomes inconvenient" show range without straining.
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Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences are handled cleanly, including the "Where one person's habit damages..." conditional and a semicolon linking two balanced clauses, with minimal error.
The one fix to reach Band 7
A typical Band 6 essay on this topic asserts that smoking is unhealthy and repeats it in different words. The lift to Band 7 comes from arguing rather than asserting: pick the freedom objection, grant what is true in it, and show exactly where it fails.
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